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Because for some odd reason blogger is not communicating well and refused to allow the reviews of AHA and FFN together, I had to put the other review responses here.

Reviews for Liberties Taken
Lily Draco chapter 3 . Jan 14 A wonderful story. I look forward to more. cheshireSorrows: Thank you! Looking forward to hear what you think of future chapters :)
DramioneAddiction chapter 3 . Jan 4 La! It was lovely! Update soon! cheshireSorrows: Thanks! And about that update soon...uhm...I'm sorry! *hides*
4leafclover0120 chapter 3 . Jan 4 Yay! cheshireSorrows: Yay, a review!
KimberlyTee chapter 3 . Jan 3 I love this continuation so thoroughly! Our couple sparkles off the page, their essentials in tact, painting a beautiful picture of a love that is rooted in friendship. Elizabeth for all her denial is in love, but what is an Elizabeth without a penchant for over analysis. I can't wait to read the next chapter cheshireSorrows: Thank you, I'm enjoying writing it! Fortunately Lizzy isn't without her over thinking - otherwise we'd be in for a somewhat boring tale. Her close relationship with Darcy will make the telling of this story both fun and difficult at the same time, and I hope you'll enjoy where I plan to take the story next :)
Karen chapter 3 . Jan 3 Lovely update, the banter between our couple is charming. Glad to see you back with a new chapter. cheshireSorrows: Thanks, I used to be terrified of writing interactions between Darcy and Lizzy, but now it's my favorite part about writing P&P. Getting their dialogue is so important especially for showing their personalities. Extremely sorry for the late update (which is still on it's way...)
c-monstre chapter 3 . Jan 3 Oh I just love this story! cheshireSorrows: Thank you, I love getting reviews!
tremu chapter 3 . Jan 3 Noted you added some stuff in the beginning, which is great. I like the little paragraph about Mrs. Graves and her marriage. She definitely seems to be the most amiable one of the sisters. Looking forward to the rest of it! cheshireSorrows: After reading your notes I thought I should add something else...I was going to send it just once more back to you for a quick read through, but I didn't want you flashing commas everywhere (I kid, I wouldn't be here without you xD)
Julianabr chapter 3 . Jan 3 Thanks for the new chapter! I like this Lizzy and Darcy very much. It is clear Lizzy 'doth protest too much' but that may be from having her hand forced as much as for being clueless. I do like to remember that this began with his proposal and kiss, both of which she accepted. I wonder at the comments of people who /knew/ they would be together; how much is the ton wanting to show their intelligence in 'knowing all along' and how much is truth? At this point, you have me craving some private conversation between the two of them. Will some of his self-protective dry humor fall away to reveal some of what he feels? Will hers? A very enjoyable story, and I anxiously await the next installment! :) cheshireSorrows: Oh Lizzy, Lizzy, Lizzy...But where would the story be without a bit of her resistance?  The world is full of gossips, even in the regency period, I think it could be a mixture of both - some actually knowing and some just saying they did. But really, who knows? Of course, I think they'll be more fun alone especially since they last time they were they got engaged ;)
excuse.my.muse chapter 3 . Jan 3 wonderful! can't wait for the next chapter! I love the banter between Darcy and Elizabeth cheshireSorrows: Thanks!
Ansujali chapter 3 . Jan 3 "...Explosive territory of a ballroom..." LOL! As always, their banter is to die for! Hysterical! cheshireSorrows: I live to write them honestly xD
Amy chapter 3 . Jan 3 I am confused. Why is there talk that Elizabeth was considered on the shelf or more mature than common by the time she is married? Jane and Caroline are older than her but Elizabeth is on the shelf while Caroline is still single with no prospects at the time? After all, in the higher circles it is common that a girl is out with 17/18 and married in the next few years. Mrs. Bennet may crow about Lydia being married with 16 but that only shows her own lower upbringing as it was a patched up thing and showed the vulgarity of her and her daughter. How old is Elizabeth and is everyone bored with their own lifes so that they have to poke their noses into her and Darcys life? cheshireSorrows: Shhh...it's okay...don't think about it too much... I've been intentionally vague about everyone's age mainly because ageing up Elizabeth and Jane would mean ageing up her sisters, and that can open up or close up the plot I have in my head so to avoid that I've just left it to the readers imagination. Though I suppose if you absolutely require such information here it is: Elizabeth is twenty-three and Jane is twenty-four. The reason they're referred to as "spinsters" or are in danger of spinsterhood is because, as you said, "in the higher circles it is common that a girl is out with 17/18 and married in the next few years" and Jane and Elizabeth have chosen to marry only for love and are already in their twentys. Caroline, for character development reasons, is not married either though I never said anything about her not being courted or pursued by anyone.  And. Of course everyone is bored with their lives. Everyone talks about everyone, we know this from our present so why should we expect anything less from our past? Darcy, is a very important catch, as is established and his engagement with Elizabeth was through a "compromise" and happened quite close to the time that Jane and Bingley were engaged - that's fodder for gossip.  How much attention the society actually pay the lives of others is debatable, however.

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Anon says / A happy assembly

A round-up of review responses because despite using Mozilla Fox, my laptop runs as if it's using Internet Explorer.

All these review responses are for Liberties Taken, chapter 3

A Happy Assembly

Mischa: Posted 03 January 2015 - 09:35 AM

 

A cheeky Darcy is a delightful thing to witness. And Elizabeth brings the best out of him.
First Mrs Graves (I like her), then the entire audience, everyone has already realized the obvious, that ODC has been courting forever and the recent engagement is just a formality of something that has long been expected.
I love this relationship of bantering and lovingly teasing one another frequently.
M.

 

 

C.Sorrows:

I think Darcy has been woefully deprived of any opportunity to be cheeky, something I hope to rectify as the story progresses, with Lizzy's help of course!

I'm glad no one minds the teasing dialogue. Their friendly relationship makes it too easy to ignore the opportunities that present themselves.

Anita: Posted 03 January 2015 - 01:26 PM

 

I just read your story and I love your Darcy and Elizabeth ! I look forward to getting to know them better as their relationship evolves

Anne S.

C. Sorrows: 

Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

taryn: Posted 03 January 2015 - 04:02 PM

Love this story and the introduction of bingley's other sister. She really opened Elizabeth's eyes to some things she can't admit to herself

Can't wait for more

Taryn

C. Sorrows: 

Thank you, I was kind of worried about how people would take her. I suppose she's kind of the "flash forward" version of Lizzy whose confident and happily married. 

wendywho: Posted 03 January 2015 - 06:02 PM

The Emma-esque idea is genius and your writing of their reparte is spot- on. I love Jane's verve- she isn't such a timid thing. This is truly delightful.

 

 C. Sorrows:

I'm glad you like it. When I first started writing P&P I was so intimidated by writing scenes with D and E, I'm glad that I've improved so much :) I've always wanted to write a different Jane so expect a slightly different one in future chapters.

acampbell: Posted 03 January 2015 - 09:50 PM

I am enjoying the fun light hearted story. Looking forward to more.

 

C. Sorrows:

Thanks, hopefully I can get into gear and actually get to writing *hides*

Kaibear: Posted 04 January 2015 - 03:13 AM

Like everyone else I am enjoying the great dialogue. Thank you and I am looking forward to more!

C. Sorrows:

Yay! You have no idea how big of a deal it is to be complimented on dialogue, I think it's definitely one of the Make-or-Break ways of knowing whether the characters behave as they should :)

 

Geri: Posted 04 January 2015 - 03:29 AM

Just started your story it has been quite a change. Loving the banter
geri

C. Sorrows:

And there will be more changes to come :)

Avanell: Posted 04 January 2015 - 05:15 AM

Excellent update! So much fun with our couple...I do hope they begin to enjoy their engagement more  

C. Sorrows:

 

I've been struggling to keep the other chapters to par, thankfully my beta has sufficiently kicked me in the rear. Unfortunately it may be a temporary determent to our happy couples. SPOILER ALERT.

 

marsha: Posted 04 January 2015 - 12:03 PM

Love this! Perhaps our cheekiest Eluzabeth yet! So funny, clever and teasing. How could Darcy be pleased with anyone else?

The talk at the Bingleys' ball seems to dispel any thoughts that simply Darcy's duty was engaged in bringing he and Elizabeth to marriage. 

C. Sorrows:

I've tried really hard to get Lizzy to be as Lizzy as possible for the moment as I'm not sure how people will take the deficiencies I plan for her to display...but a Lizzy is not Lizzy without her wit! 

I think in this tale one of Lizzy's faults is being somewhat dense xD

dreeem: Posted 04 January 2015 - 03:40 PM

This is very interesting. Very AU. Yet Darcy is already smitten when "proposing" and she is blind to it. I wonder whether Lydia's situation is canon and Darcy's involvement.

When can we expect the next post?

C. Sorrows:

Yes I suppose it would be quite different. I wanted to throw our lovey characters in the proverbial deep end and see what would happen fortunately for everyone the results thus far haven't been disastrous. 

For the moment what I will say is that Lydia's role is not particularly pivotal in D and E's story, though it does play a part in their recent past (a few months before the story takes place).

Sadly I've been useless since college started and the two chapters I had done were disappointing so I'm starting the updates I had from scratch so...hopefully before the end of this month there will be at least one update.

lucy6526: Posted 13 January 2015 - 05:37 AM

Love this sweet funny Elizabeth!

C. Sorrows:

Thank you!

 

Emlyn: Posted 14 January 2015 - 06:47 PM

Love the relationship between the two.  It's amazing that everyone else can see what they (and especially Elizabeth) are blind to.  Very enjoyable story so far.

C. Sorrows: 

I have this thing about love, real love, that the people involved don't realize how in love they actually are though it's clear for everyone else. Darcy, perhaps knows to some degree, but Lizzy...well, she'll catch up ;)

 

Darcylove: Posted 29 January 2015 - 06:51 AM

This is fun and I enjoy that they really are friends, but I wonder how it is that Elizabeth will come to realize her attraction and love for him and how he will express his to her. Look forward to more. Please!
Darcylove 

 

C. Sorrows: 

Thank you, I'm really enjoying writing about the two together in this scenario. As for when Elizabeth will realize her attraction, well, telling you would be giving everything away :) 

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Anon Says...

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I get a lot of Guest reviews that bring up a lot of good points or ask questions, and sometimes I just want to acknowledge them for the review (because seriously, reviews are awesome), but there's just one problem: THEY DON'T HAVE ACCOUNTS. 

So, instead of clogging up an update with a response to those reviews, I have decided to make use of this blog (which doesn't get enough attention from me) to respond to them. 

Flavor of the Month:  Guest chapter 2 . Jul 15 Bella is annoying as hell. And he was the weird one? I would be very surprise if in real life the guy would want to see her again. He wasn't as awkward as her and she is the one that had all those one-night stand. Stay away Edward. Reply Glad you think so, I was aiming for a not-immediately likable character simply because Bella has always been accused of being "perfect" because everyone thinks she's so awesome when she has very little to recommend her. I want to grow to like her myself, and this was my impression of her when I read Twilight at first, with just a bit more personality. After a meeting that they had, I wouldn't want to meet her again either if I was Edward, but life doesn't work that way, especially not fanfic ;)

Guest chapter 2 . Jul 14 Brilliant which is another term for your story. Thanks Reply Thanks for the review! Hope to hear more of your thoughts in the future :)

Guest chapter 1 . Jul 14 please please write more...this seems like a very promising story ive come across in a very long time...so im literally thirsting for an update...I hope you have a regular schedule.. ps. If its reviews u desire ill leave one everyday... Reply Glad you think so! I'll try hard to update as regularly as I can, I'm aiming for every Monday so I hope you can pull through and leave me a line every now and again :) Brotherly Advice and Sisterly Persuasion CRB chapter 2 . 3h ago I truly enjoyed Sibling Intervention, and look forward to this one. There's only one thing that keeps bugging me. You use the word "droll" a lot - not a bad thing in and of itself, but it doesn't always seem to fit and so jerks me out of the story. Droll having a humorous, whimsical, or odd quality (Merriam-Webster) Reply Corrected to "dull", thanks for that, the need for a Beta Reader strikes again. JRB chapter 2 . 3h ago How long do you anticipate this sequel to be? I think it's very refreshing, on the one hand, that Elizabeth is being rather cautious with her heart even though she really has no reason to mistrust Darcy's motive for kissing her. On the other hand, if Darcy had the balls to kiss her in the first place, I don't think he would've been the type to assume she disliked it. Mistaking Elizabeth's wit and teasing for flirting in the novel is, to me, perfectly reasonable and excusable. In this instance, however, if he already had the nerve to act on his impulses and essentially compromise her, Darcy would've done the honorable thing and asked her to hear him out and then propose. That seems like his character, anyway. Reply Well I haven't decided on the length yet, but roughly thirty chapters like Sibling Intervention I imagine.  I think Elizabeth is rather cautious with people, though that may just be my interpretation of her. As open as she is, she isn't easily convinced (except when she's determined to be) and with something as important as her heart, I don't think she would so easily give it away. Anyone who wants it has to work for it (hear that Darcy?). Remember, the kiss at the end of Sibling Intervention was neither returned nor denied, Darcy had no idea what to actually make of it. In my mind, women and love are relatively new to him because he's never been in a situation like this with anyone else. Also, Elizabeth insisted during Sibling Intervention that they should forget about the who-compromised-who situation (she thought she compromised him, and he thought he compromised her). He was actually on the verge of confessing in that forest in the last chapter, but ended up kissing her instead. But all that will be explained/expanded in the coming chapters. Thank you for your review! Guest chapter 1 . Jul 13 (virtual love) so excited and so ready for this :3 Reply You and me both! Thanks for the review!

Sibling Intervention

Amy chapter 17 . 21h ago

You made a mistake here. It would be a terrible faux pas that Bingley went into the room of Jane when she was ill. No single male was allowed to visit an unmarried girl in her bedroom, it doesnt matter if she is sick or not. I dont know if that terrible movie from 2005 inspired you to write this but it just wasnt done. Her reputation would be in tatters.

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*brandishes creative license, turns into a potato and rolls into the sunset*

Just kidding. 

But seriously, she wasn't entirely alone - she did have a maid stationed in her room the entire time she was sick, plus Bingley left the door open the entire time. Afterwards, Louisa joined them. Later on after supper, he isn't alone with her either and is with Elizabeth and Jane.

I have no idea how anyone got to know each other before marriage, but I am aware that the prospective couple is very rarely alone. Other than Darcy and Lizzy of course, we can't always be as well-mannered and full of propriety as we should.

The 2005 movie wasn't that bad. No idea where you're getting the idea that that adaption caused it, if you think I'm wrong it's more likely that it's my fault than a movie based on the novel.

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